Hi Stu Dent,
I have some concerns about your final paper:
First, there are no sources from after 1968, yet music therapy has grown by leaps and bounds since then. I'm curious as to why you didn't pursue more recent scholarship; much of it is easily accessible via JSTOR, EBSCO, and other library databases.
Second, the case studies seem oddly out of place, as if they were pasted in. There's no setup, no discussion, etc.
Third, I'm curious to know how you got your hands on an unpublished manuscript, "The effect of music on drawing," from 1951, as well as the couple of master's theses you cite in your bibliography.
Finally, there are some unusual shifts in voice/tone in the paper. Some writing is in a casual first-person; other sections are in a formal, passive voice.
Any insight you could offer would be appreciated.
MB
I have some concerns about your final paper:
First, there are no sources from after 1968, yet music therapy has grown by leaps and bounds since then. I'm curious as to why you didn't pursue more recent scholarship; much of it is easily accessible via JSTOR, EBSCO, and other library databases.
Second, the case studies seem oddly out of place, as if they were pasted in. There's no setup, no discussion, etc.
Third, I'm curious to know how you got your hands on an unpublished manuscript, "The effect of music on drawing," from 1951, as well as the couple of master's theses you cite in your bibliography.
Finally, there are some unusual shifts in voice/tone in the paper. Some writing is in a casual first-person; other sections are in a formal, passive voice.
Any insight you could offer would be appreciated.
MB